the train, I stay and listen
to Mom reminisce.
Lovely. I especially enjoy how you break the line between “missing // the train”. “Happily missing” as a first line introduces a bittersweet feeling, which works well with the ideas of nostalgia & reminiscence, and the linebreak also underlines the themes of connection vs. disconnect present in the piece. You packed a lot of meaning and nuance into these 17 syllables 🙂
That’s a great compliment! Thank you so much.
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